Scarling.Kitten
Mod in a turban
 Number of posts : 1
Location : Sleeping next to my guitar
Age : 16
Registration date : 2006-08-15
 | | Subject: The End Tue Aug 15, 2006 6:48 am | |
| The last page of this life
The last refrian of this song
I'll move on but not knowing,
Whether to forget or remember
I'll change, I know,
For bad or for good
Maybe I'll reach my dreams
I really hope I do
So I'll go now and try to move on
Never forgetting the black sheep,
Who either made this heaven or hell | |
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foaf.scribble
Mod in a tam 'o shanter
Number of posts : 129
Age : 32
Location : England :]
Age : 14
Registration date : 2006-08-11
| | Subject: Re: The End Tue Aug 15, 2006 11:59 am | |
| this is really good, i like the metaphors
maybe add another line to the last stanza? to really wrap it up :]
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SnipSnap
Biro
 Number of posts : 96
Age : 32
Location : In a wet wipe box ... Help!
Age : 14
Writing forte/s : details and dialogue
Registration date : 2006-08-11
| | Subject: Re: The End Wed Aug 16, 2006 5:18 pm | |
| OOO, NO LAST LINE! LEAVE IT LIIKE THAT!!!!!!!!!! OMGSHHHHHHHHHHHHH, that is so flipping sexy,  seriously, i loved that, it was short, to the point, yet really good and summed up a lot of great stuff quickly. AMAZING! GUT deMATCH!!!!!!!!!! | |
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