Lachrymose_Emily3
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 | | Subject: My Willow Tree Mon Aug 14, 2006 4:20 am | |
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Lachrymose_Emily3
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Kips (Big Shot/ admin)
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| | Subject: Re: My Willow Tree Mon Aug 14, 2006 9:36 am | |
| Hunnibunch, you've over-edited! It was longer before wasn't it? anyway, i love these two lines but you need to bulk up the middle a bit more. :-) Good work! | |
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AngelWithTheScabbedWings
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| | Subject: Re: My Willow Tree Mon Aug 14, 2006 10:06 am | |
| It isn't really a poem it is more of something you would say to yuor tree it needs more and the . are not needed  | |
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foaf.scribble
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| | Subject: Re: My Willow Tree Mon Aug 14, 2006 11:19 am | |
| yeah i agree with the other two, it needs lengthening but its a sweet idea :]
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Kips (Big Shot/ admin)
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| | Subject: Re: My Willow Tree Mon Aug 14, 2006 12:38 pm | |
| Where is this willow tree anyway? Is it like, in your head? | |
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